We felt as though the opening text on our trailer was too long so we shorted it down. We wanted for the text to be short and simple, so we started to look at nursery rhymes as they have a good, short and simple flow to them. We decided to use a line from Humpty Dumpty:
''All the king's horses and all the king's men
couldn't put Humpty together again.''
couldn't put Humpty together again.''
This is the real version; we changed some words in it and came to this:
''All the king's horses and all the kings men
Couldn't put his victims together again.''
This was too long and the king's horse’s part didn’t fit in with the idea of the trailer. So we cut that part out so it now says:
''All the king's men
Couldn't put his victims together again''
This sounds a lot better than the first idea of
''A school full of children,
One killer caretaker,
And his thirst to kill''
The text also fits in with the storyline of the trailer, the king's men being the police and the not being able to put his victim's together meaning that he killed his victims so they were unable to get them back.
Louise
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